Hey guys I'm righting a story that has a abusive parent as one of the main characters. In a scene that I'm writing i need someone to help me out with a word to call a child. Something that is extremely cruel/ traumatizing. Below i have the scene written and need some help.

WARNING content may be uncomfortable for some

I looked at my mother's face and saw her cry of joy mixed with the fear of what could happen if caught. I ran across the train tracks and expected to see my mother on my heels. I no longer felt the safety of being in her arms for a moment and quickly looked back. Carver stood holding her by the throat with a rusty shard of metal from the ground.
Carver: Listen here boy. Either you come back across these tracks or I kill your mother.
Cries came from my mother’s face as the thunder roared above.
The blade slowly began to break the skin as he yelled out again.
Carver: 5 seconds you little ____, otherwise your bitch of a mother gets put down.


Segment of a child's past that he reflects on when he gets older. Just need some help with that word in the blank. Thanks a lot guys :D
I'll let you know when the full story is out.

8 years ago

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I'm not sure, but c*nt is a very harsh word for a parent to call their child and would likely scare and upset said child

8 years ago
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the only thing is that word is a bit too cliche for what im looking for but your on the right page. C*nt isn't really referred to a boy more a girl right?

8 years ago
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Nah I think it goes both ways, I've seen it used equally towards both genders. It is cliche but a bit uncommon to see in stories, and from the way the abuser talks it seems like it would be a word he would use frequently anyway, almost like a nickname for the child? I don't know, it's all I can think of

8 years ago
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Carver: 5 seconds you little brony, otherwise your bitch of a mother gets put down on the MLP cage.

brony

8 years ago
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Weeb. :X

8 years ago
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I'd go with "little shit". Good luck with the story!

8 years ago
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that works. Still open to other suggestions. thanks btw blackfrye.

8 years ago
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Little shit is the most commonly expected variation. :)

8 years ago
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"Shit" or "Fuck" are basic, but serve their purpose adequately. Plus, it's probably more realistic- I doubt an abusive parent would have the brainpower required to come up with anything eloquent.

8 years ago
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You'd be surprised then, at how much pleasure such sadistic individuals take in their efforts to hurt others. Much like any hobbyist, they tend to go the extra mile for their pursuit.

..that being said- no, you're right. I've only ever encountered basic variations in that regard, with little shit by far being the one I'd expect to hear.

8 years ago
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+1 for little shit

8 years ago
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fucktard

8 years ago
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dickweed, cuntrag, meatbag, fuckwit, turd

8 years ago
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Thanks guys for the help. Ill make sure to share bits of the story when i get further along. Currently am at almost 20 pages with only a small bit of it complete.

8 years ago
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Shit, crap, twerp, scum, fucker...

8 years ago
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shitcrap and scumfucker would also work

8 years ago
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prick? or maybe you want something harsher...

8 years ago
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a bit harsher

8 years ago
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"Maggot" springs to mind.

8 years ago
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sounds like a drill army sergant

8 years ago
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Feculence

8 years ago
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Bastard or shit works. To me the former is perhaps more insulting, because on a psychological level it may imply an illegitimate, or even unwanted child.

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Punk/bastard/pssy/dckhead

8 years ago
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Mistake.

8 years ago
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It's easier if the child is already troubled by a certain problem. If he isn't, well, make the parent insult the child like he would to an adult.

8 years ago
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I hope you use spellcheck/grammar check on this story because there are many glaring issues.

Pustule, cumstain, shitstain, cuntrag, whoreson(a bit archaic), fuckwad, retard, 'tard, to name a few.

8 years ago
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just wrote this bit in last few mins thats why its not been edited yet.

8 years ago
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Bastard?

8 years ago
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Dick handler, cock gobbler, cumstain, jizz rag, fetid shit, twat, fuck peice, arsehole, shit, mistake...

Could go the other way and changed the dialogue...

Should have pulled out...
Should have wiped you off the bedsheets...
Been adopted...

Depends what you are going for, authenticity, black humour, realism, impact...

8 years ago
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The word appropriate in that situation would be bastard. I also agree with Khazadson that your grammar, spelling and punctuation needs serious work. I highly recommend you get "Merriam Webster's Guide to Punctuation and Style."

8 years ago
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just wrote this bit in last few mins thats why its not been edited yet.

8 years ago
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just wanted to give the scenerio for people to get the word

8 years ago
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brat

8 years ago
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Closed 8 years ago by ivk97.