thanks

Ty

+1

The description is pretty bad imo. You shouldn't 'explain' your game in the description, you should provide a synopsis and an overview of features. Quick example:

"Welcome to a world of cute destruction. You are McDroid, a mechanical and cuddly device who's sent out to colonize a planet and save it from the baddies. There's only one law - his law! Kick ass in a whole new perspective with a unique blend of Action and Strategy that will blow your mind.

<key features>
This many levels! Each of varying awesomeness.
With over <this many> weapons, the strategic possibilities are endless.
Bad guys are smart! This AI feature will keep you on your toes!
etc. etc. etc."

The way you wrote it was a bit unprofessional. I don't think you can't use MJ's name without licensing it. :p You also don't want to turn off users by saying they like dumb games (overzealous towards your own), while telling people to buy it is redundant. You want to get them interested and intrigued. And you want your game to shine rather than your own thoughts of it. And it's better to just say what it is instead of how you hope people will see it.

So yeah, I think it needs a lot of reworking Mr. Elefant. It needs proper formatting too and maybe some fixes to the System Requirements (capitalizing, adding the full processor names...). Take a look at some AAA titles like http://store.steampowered.com/app/213670/ and successful indie titles like http://store.steampowered.com/app/91600/ to see how those go.

The presentation is just as important as the quality of the game. So you will want to make it simple, effective, and possibly amusing. Just blend the themes into a digestible overview and you'll be all set. :>

Ballsack's a bit slow.
I reworked the super verbose stream into version 2 and 3, it's substantially awesomer.